Some music I created. Trying to sound industrial.

[ph0sph0ruz]

While I'm learning coding and graphic techniques I've been dabbling with some music. I need to learn how to do some stuff like Connor, I have no experience with wind instruments.

https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/industrial1

https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/industrial2

One bonus track, more of a horror/sci-fi track, starts really slow:
https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/eeire

[dandymcgee]

Oh yeah, totally saw this on your site after you posted in Hello, World! topic. Kinda blew up my speakers.. but I liked it a lot haha. Keep at it man.

Edit: Ooooo Eeire is wayy better than the industrial tracks. I could listen to that for hours [while playing a game] and not even notice it was there.

[ph0sph0ruz]

Oh yeah, totally saw this on your site after you posted in Hello, World! topic. Kinda blew up my speakers.. but I liked it a lot haha. Keep at it man.

Edit: Ooooo Eeire is wayy better than the industrial tracks. I could listen to that for hours [while playing a game] and not even notice it was there.

Actually that was my first gut feeling too. Thanks for the feedback. I've been trying to go more for a feel and I think the Eerie track captures a certain feeling way better than I did with the others.

[YourNerdyJoe]

Eeire is one sick track. So far it's my favorite out of your songs.
Industrial2 is not bad either. Seems like you already started improving after the first one.
I'm a HUGE industrial fan so it's cool see other people on this forum have an interest in it.

Keep at it. I wanna see more insane tracks like Eeire

[ph0sph0ruz]

I made two more this weekend. I'm going more for feelings when I'm writing these.

The first is a peaceful track:
https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/peaceful

Then the second is more of an action type track.
https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/ready2fight

Mod note: Fixed link.

[ph0sph0ruz]

Eeire is one sick track. So far it's my favorite out of your songs.
Industrial2 is not bad either. Seems like you already started improving after the first one.
I'm a HUGE industrial fan so it's cool see other people on this forum have an interest in it.

Keep at it. I wanna see more insane tracks like Eeire

Thanks for the feedback.

[dandymcgee]

Both links were pointing to peaceful, I changed the second to point to "Ready2fight" as I'm assuming that's your action track.

Ready2fight:
I think the part from 0:28 to 0:54 could have ended at 0:40, it was a cool effect but got annoying to listen to.
I like the 0:54 - 0:55 transition where the weird instrument disappeared.
I expected the 1:21 transition to happen at 1:11, after two measures of the guitar? solo. After seeing what you did with the cymbal tap coming in before the transition though, I think it would have been best at 1:18 after the B-flat.
After this it transitions back to the weird instrument, but apparently I have Stockholm syndrome because the familiarity somewhat comforts me this time around.
At 1:42 it lacked some signal that the song was coming to a close and instead ended abruptly at 1:49. Another solo or a fade would have seemed appropriate here.

Peaceful:
0:20 - 0:30 Holy shit. That is fucking beautiful.
1:50 - Another very well placed solo.
I like how at 2:31 you briefly return to the solo and a few of the other sequences to "summarize" your genius before closing it out. This song ends perfectly.

As my notes make fairly obvious I liked Peaceful more, I could listen to that for hours easily. Ready2fight is definitely good though and I hope you keep working on stuff like it.

You clearly have a good understanding of song progression and an intriguing choice of instrumentals. Thanks for sharing!

[ph0sph0ruz]

Both links were pointing to peaceful, I changed the second to point to "Ready2fight" as I'm assuming that's your action track.

Ready2fight:
I think the part from 0:28 to 0:54 could have ended at 0:40, it was a cool effect but got annoying to listen to.
I like the 0:54 - 0:55 transition where the weird instrument disappeared.
I expected the 1:21 transition to happen at 1:11, after two measures of the guitar? solo. After seeing what you did with the cymbal tap coming in before the transition though, I think it would have been best at 1:18 after the B-flat.
After this it transitions back to the weird instrument, but apparently I have Stockholm syndrome because the familiarity somewhat comforts me this time around.
At 1:42 it lacked some signal that the song was coming to a close and instead ended abruptly at 1:49. Another solo or a fade would have seemed appropriate here.

Peaceful:
0:20 - 0:30 Holy shit. That is fucking beautiful.
1:50 - Another very well placed solo.
I like how at 2:31 you briefly return to the solo and a few of the other sequences to "summarize" your genius before closing it out. This song ends perfectly.

As my notes make fairly obvious I liked Peaceful more, I could listen to that for hours easily. Ready2fight is definitely good though and I hope you keep working on stuff like it.

You clearly have a good understanding of song progression and an intriguing choice of instrumentals. Thanks for sharing!

Thank you for fixing the link. Ready2fight was the one I was going for on the action song.

I really appreciate the feedback. I've been playing guitar for over 30 years now and listening to a lot of music of course but these are the first handful that I've written.

I agree that Ready2fight was repetitive. I think it needs some more work. I really didn't do too much arrangement on it to be honest. I had to mess around with the guitar sound on that one a bit to get it to my liking also.

Glad you really liked the Peaceful one. I did take some care to place the notes and come up with the phrasing in C Major. I never worked with the flutes before and I had two different flutes in certain places.

I'm really humbled by your comments. Thank you.

[ph0sph0ruz]

This isn't industrial but it's my first FL Studio track. I finally broke down and bought it.

https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/demo-on-the-edge

[ph0sph0ruz]

And yet another test.. this time more piano and more upbeat. I haven't done anything like this before.

https://soundcloud.com/ph0sph0ruz/demo-new-day